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The Venture Of Ginger McNeader Chapter 1 Part 2

Updated: Jan 13, 2021

Chapter One Part Two:

“Shock them,” he said ruthlessly as the leader walked out

‘ZAP!’ They were now shocked and could not move. They were left there for the evening because they locked the door with… something. When they finally got up they were shocked,


Who was that?” My mom said out of breath.

“Why are you asking me?” I asked confused,

“We need to get out now,” Mom said walking to the door.

But, the door would not budge at all Mom even tried her keys. Nothing worked, they were trapped.


Now you may be wondering who these guys? Also, why being trapped in your home bad?

We were stuck here so that means the leader could access us whenever he wants!

Turns out these guys were from an unknown country located in the middle of the sea!

Back to the story,



So we were trapped with no escape in sight! Even the windows and the back door were locked! I mean man were they good!



“We have to get out!” I said looking around.

I really wanted to help my neighbors. I watch them all get shocked and locked, (Hey that rhymes! Oh, sorry).


We were slowly invaded until it happened just as we feared it. The leader and his men went and slowly took over the world as we started losing hope. Usually when men come in the people try to riot, I said 'try' they would just shock them and leave. Soon they took over the world with help from satellites they hacked them so they could laser beam everyone in seconds but they used it to bring fear to everyone.


2 YEARS LATER


I had been plotting for years trying to find a way to take them out. We had much more resources and, the Skeletores (the bad guys) had a mainland. I planned to take it out. Without their resources, they would have to fall back. But, the mainland was miles away from the shore and it can be up in the sky or down in the sea, it could be everywhere.


“Mom we have to break out,” I said standing up from the couch.

“Gingy we tried for so long,” Mom said hopelessly.

“I have a plan!” I exclaim.

“No Gingy you have a suicide mission,” Mom said raising her voice.

“Fine, I’ll go by myself,” I spoke

“So what is this plan of yours,” Mom said carelessly not expecting a good plan.

I told her the planning bit by bit but, I am not telling you! I want you to see what it is even though it did not work at all. So we first started making booby traps at all the entrances so when they come we’ll be ready. When they came the plan was working


“Uh,” said one person as he entered the house he falls flat on the ground as we dragged him in

We got his shocker because we have seen them shock us too many times.

The next day they sent another person to look for the person we shocked

‘Knock knock’ and then ‘THUD’ he was there we shocked him but he walked like nothing happened.

“Heh, you really thought I would get shocked?” He boomed I sprung the trap, nothing happened.

“RUN!” Mom said as she ran to the back door,

I dashed out running and running and running.

I made it to the woods death behind my shoulder. I ran with regret about not helping my mother until I saw a man.

“Hey you!” he said dashing up to me,

He caught me as I was slowly surrounded by men…



P.S I edited it after the comments :)



TO BE CONTINUED


 
 
 

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Thanks for your feedback I really enjoy that you are commenting thanks for viewing my post. -The Scribbler

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One suggestion, can you let us know who's talking with more detail like in that comment under? Like, in the beginning, it says he said as the leader pranced out. Make sure to proof-read, awesome book @The Scribbler ;)

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Jan 13, 2021

This reminds me of TMD's really old running sentence books. It's like his books now combined with his old books. Decent 6/10 but needs some improvement with proper grammar punctuation setting details and capital letters. It definitely does have great potential though. Please don't delete and misunderstood this as a hate comment. I'm trying to make this an informative critique comment. Thank you. I love supersonic's new post but it's also suffering from most of the above

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I hope you enjoy!

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